Powerful writing

It was night. There was a full moon. There was an owl in the tree. The owl caught a little mouse.

We worked together to brainstorm powerful nouns, adjectives, similes and metaphors to change the writing to a powerful one. This is what Hannah, Ella, George, Na-Myung, Lois, Amelia, George, Aron, Charlotte and Matthew came up with.

It was a dark, cold and gloomy night. The broken smile moon hung in the empty sky. A white owl sat in an old crumbling Oak staring wide-eyed and hungrily at dinner. In a flash, the owl swooped down and snatched up the helpless, terrified wood mouse.